Gearchi.Study ~ギヤのχ~Jovi

This week of English lessons was mainly on constructing sentences. Mainly working on the past perfect and things related to that. Was not pretty interesting though. In any case, the only bit I enjoyed was making sentences that could some what link to animes I’ve been watching. I used sentences such as ” After Misa obtained the Deathnote, She gave it to Light ” . Just one of the many examples.

Well, here is the post.

Brief plot:
There is this married couple, Lacey and Molly. They went up on the high mountains to see a plat know as Samphire. On their second visit, Molly tried to push Lacey off the clift.

Go find for the story somwhere if you really want to know what happened.

Now for the review.

I do not really like the story Samphire, for the Characters have exagerrated personalities, there is a lack of intensity and there is not much of an obvious climax.

Molly and Lacey both have exagerating behaviour. Molly have a submissive behaviour and she represses her feelings. This is exagerated as she is being made to do whatever Lacey wanted her to do. Making her a pretty much a remote control robot that follows Lacey’s every command. She also represses her feelings to such a state that when it bottles up, she nearly sent Lacey flying to his death, down the mountains. Lacey on the other hand love to be in charge of everything, in other word, molopolizing the situation.This makes it pretty much like the story would be pretty much what he had planned for it to be, except the last bit. He is also ignorant, thus making a lack of interaction in the story. Thus, the characters play quite a vital role in spoiling the story.

There is a lack of intensity in the story, for the story is one, very slow moving, two, the twist of plot is not well portrayed. The story took quite a while to build up the mood. And as soon as it is builded up, it is shattered near instantly by the twist of plot, not allowing the story to intensify. In stead of stating just the feelings that each character have for themselves, emotions of what they feel about each othershould have been clearly portrayed before the twist of plot. The twist of the plot was also poorly done, as it was not very attention seeking. It was made to seem just like a push, nothing much. It should have exagerated a bit on the pushing bit. The intensity in the story is overall rather poor.

Last but not least, there was not climax to create interest in the story. It was a rather dry plot and there were not exciting parts to it. Some action, in terms of a heated arguement, or when the characters react to each other more spontaneously could have made the story better.

In conclusion, the story was not very well written.

Lessons learned continued on part 2…

Well, this time is with regards to Literature lessons.

Ok, one thing that I picked up from today’s lesson.
Sometimes, certain points in a short story can be contradicting, thus, one will have to read it through once or twice again before you can conclude what is really happening, be it the plot, theme or characters.